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Subject: Re: Why the children?...Why don't you get an American editor if you pretend to be one?

OKKAR66127@xxxxxxx wrote:
> 
>                                   Why the children?
>                                    *******************
> By- Dr. Myron Segal, M.D.C.M
> F.A.C.S., F.A.C.C., F.A.C.C.P
> 
> Letter to the editor
> 
>         I am a heart surgeon and former professor trained to save
> lives all over the world through medicine and education. Someone
> who took care of Vietnamese civilians during the Vietnam war, took
> care of wounded children in the Israeli 1967 war and served my
> country during the second world war. 

--Unlike you, I suspect from your poor English grammer later in this essay, I really am 
American and my grandfather served in the Second World War in Europe as a young man in 
his 20's.  That is really incredible that you served in Israel and Vietnam as well.  My 
grandfather was his 50's then they would not have enlisted him if he had volunteered.  
The way you introduce yourself as a "heart surgeon...trained to save lives all over the 
world thrugh medicine (of course) and education" is suspect.   My parents live next door 
to a cardiologist and I would be really suprised to hear him describe himself as a 
"heart surgeon".  I would love to know what all those letters after your name stand for.

As a true American patriot I
> cannot help but feel that a gross injustice recently took place on my
> visit to Yangon, Myanmar. The Japanese government had offered
> this emerging country Polio vaccine for vaccination of children and
> to build 500 schools for the children of this country.

--This Japanese...Polio vaccine.   You are missing an article between country and Polio. 
Perhaps you could have said...they had offered this emerging country "a supply" of Polio 
vaccine, or "the" polio vaccine, or "a" polio vaccine.  Then you would not have had to 
repeat "for vaccination of children" which is redundant.  It is amazing you have a 
medical degree when you could not have passed Freshman English at most colleges. You 
also need to realize that the structure of your sentence makes it look as if they are 
also going to use the vaccine to build schools.  There is no way you are a native 
speaker of English.

 I learned that
> the opposition party had actually complained to Japan not to supply
> the vaccine and the schools because it could make the present
> government image to the world more understanding and also to
> create hardship for the people so that the people would feel
> neglected by the government. In this way it would be much easier
> for the opposition to agitate the people to rise against the
> government. Politics should not interfere with humanity. 

I am not even going to try to correct the grammer in this phrase.  I will only say that 
in 6th grade they teach us that there is such a thing as a run-on sentence. This type of 
sentence needs to be broken down into pieces to keep the clarity of one's ideas. 

The thing that really struck me as strange about this part is that you believe that 
"Politics should not interfere with humanity."  This proves not only that you are not 
from the United States but that you are probably not even from the West.  The US gives 
out large sums of money to foreign countries in an effort to promote democracy and 
humanity in foreign governments.  It is part of US policy to use politics to promote 
humanity. The first settlers in the New World came here because the felt that the 
politics of the old world didn't promote humanity.  Now many European governments have 
similar policies as does the US with regards to using their economic and political 
influence to promote humane treatment of other people.  This may in fact be the real 
reason why Vietnam was granted the schools instead of Myanmar/Burma.  However, the main 
reason why Myanmar probably got the vaccine but lost the schools is becuase many past 
Myanmar Ministers of Education were former generals who never bothered to finish high 
school. As for government interfering with education, schools in Myanmar have a history 
of being shut down for indefinite periods of time by the government.  Both of these 
factors make it look as if the Myanmar government does not value education or perhaps 
has a fear of educated people. I guess Japan thought that building schools in Myanmar 
could possibly be a waste of money.

These
> schools were then granted to Vietnam which is a booming economy
> and can afford the schools. Myanmar was denied the schools but
> fortunately the vaccine made their (how about "its" since you used the singular form for "vaccine") way to Myanmar. We fought side
> by side with this country. The heritage of any country is its children, > their education and their health. Politics should never be a part of
> this equation.

I would like to remind you since you claim that you are a US citizen, that if you grew 
up here, as a child, politics were part of the equation of your education and health 
every step of the way.  State governments prescribe what material will be covered in 
school from grade one.  There are National guidelines and parameters to meet but for the 
most part the State governments handle the day to day specifics.  I have watched on 
television my state legislature here in Virginia reviewing graphs and charts to decide 
if a new program is effective for raising the math scores of elementary school students. 
 I have listened to President Clinton argue for more scholarships and tax breaks for 
college students and their families.  The appointment of the Surgeon General is a very 
big deal that takes place in Washington.  The last one we had was instrumental in 
bringing the ceiling down on the cigarette manufacturers who had to appear before 
congress and testify about the safty of their product.  There are federal laws that 
regulate their advertising practices to keep children from becoming hooked on 
cigarettes.  Medicare is a government subsidised program for the health of low income 
people including children.  If you believe that politics has nothing to do with the 
education and health of children then you haven't lived in the United States for two 
minutes.  If you did, then you never turned on the television and watched the news or 
picked up a newspaper.  Perhaps you live in the Myanmar Embassy and read your home-town 
newspaper.

 It is total political discrimination in my opinion. As a
> doctor I would like someone to explain to me why punish the
> children and their human rights?

As an educated person with a University and graduate degree, you should realize that you 
cannot "punish children and their human rights."  You can punish children and violate 
their human rights or disregard their human rights, but you cannot "punish someone's 
human rights".  You have more creative grammer than any American doctor I have ever met.

Please do your self a favor and take some ESL (English as a Second Language) classes or 
find an American that shares your ideas to edit your work.  If you put this shabby stuff 
on the net, I will definately embarrass you again.  If you are a foreign propagandist, 
I'm sorry your government didn't train you better in English before they put you to work 
as an "American heart-surgeon"  Perhaps the Universities in Myanmar were shut down while 
you were there and you never got the chance to hone your skills.

> 
> Using politics does not punish the politician
> but only the innocent victim. Why was this tolerated by the rest of
> the world? 

Why does your employer tolerate your shabby performance as a propagandist?  If you 
worked for me, I would fire you.  Who are you writing for?  (By this I mean who is the 
intended audience of your essay) When I read this I laughed and I have never responded 
to any thing like this on the net before, but I will be looking out for you.  Nothing is 
funnier than to see someone do a bad imitation of yourself.  If I pretended to be 
Burmese I could probably make you laugh too.